ELIZABETH MORALES RAMOS
OUTLINE
1. Introduction
2. Personal information about time
a) Name
b) Origin
c) Personality
d) Likes and dislikes
e) My job
3. The positive points in my life
a) My family
b) My friends
c) The many places where I have lived
4. My goals (short and long term)
a) To finish my career
b) To get a job
c) To buy my own house and car
d) To get married and have children
5. Conclusion
a) My family
b) My friends
c) The many places where I have lived
4. My goals (short and long term)
a) To finish my career
b) To get a job
c) To buy my own house and car
d) To get married and have children
5. Conclusion
Some important aspects of my life
Have you ever though what goes on in your life or other people’s live? I had had many experiences have throughout my life and you will know my personal information such as my complete name, origin and birthday, how my personality is, what I like and dislike, and my job. In addition, you will know the positive points in my life that are very important for me, my main goals that I have planned to achieve in the short and in the long term.
Let us start! My full name is Elizabeth Morales Ramos, I was born in Juarez Chihuahua in November 28th, 1989. I am a happy girl, cheerful, intelligent, easygoing, sociable, charismatic and charming. Although I have a lot of positive aspects about my personality, also I have my hidden side, because I am an impulsive, crazy girl, when people make me angry most of the times I discuss the situation and even more if I am right. But rarely show my hidden side, unless someone provokes me. Talking about my likes I enjoy sharing time with people, listening to music, dancing, going to cinema, nightclubs, talking by cell phone, travel and writing interesting stuff about something crazy like metaphors. In addition, my dislikes are mainly to cook, wash the dishes, hypocrite and cheating people and overcrowded places. Recently, I got my first job with my aunt, she is a dentist and I am her receptionist, the job is interesting and I have learned several things about this job.
My family is the most important aspect in my life; they are always with me in all the aspects. My family is composed by my father named Jose Luis, my mother Susana, my brother Jose Luis, my sister Edith, and me. The relationship with them is so good and important for me and I have a lot of communication with them. In addition, my friends are very important too, they are with me when I need their help; I like to share time with them because it is fun and we spend a lot of good moments and experiences together. Another important aspect is that along with my life I have known some places around Mexico because of my dad’s job. When I was born, we lived in Juarez Chihuahua, for the first eight years of my life, after that we moved to Calvillo where I studied 3rd and 4th years of elementary school, and after that we moved to Aguascalientes where I studied 5th, 6th and 1st grades of junior high school. The last place where we lived before coming to Aguascalientes was Mexico City. It was amazing know a place like this and I enjoyed the moments that I had in the DF a lot. Now, I am very happy about living in Aguascalientes. My family chose to live here forever.
I have a lot of important goals that I would like to achieve, but my most important in short and long term, are the following. The most important goal this moment is to finish my major and get a good job, in order to develop my profession. In addition, my other goals in long term are very important too, for example to buy my own car and house, get married and have one or two children. And I pretend to achieve these goals in the next five and ten years.
As a conclusion, I hope this essay helps people to know more about me, my most important aspects as my personal information, positive points or aspects in my life and my main goals. Therefore, I hope this information is clear and expresses what I consider the most important aspects of my life.

1st peer revision
ResponderEliminarby: Susana
I think that the content of the essay was interesting, also the essay achieve the writer's purpose because her audience could learn more about Eli. This essay contains enough details for example whe she describes about what she likes and where she has lived. Everything is relevant and the essay do not contain unrelated ideas or details that can distrct the reader. Also in this essay there are not unramiliar terms explained or defined but i consider that it is not necessary.
Talking about the organization, the ideas and details are organized. Also she used logical connections between ideas and sentences.
In the style,the menaning is clear, and she used some connecting words that help students to understand better the essay, also the language is used appropiately for the audience and she used some words that were changed by synonyms in order for the text not sound repetitive.